一次成功的雅思寫(xiě)作復(fù)議.

　　為各位考生整理了一次成功的雅思寫(xiě)作復(fù)議，供考生們參考使用。

　　學(xué)生第一次來(lái)郵:

　　我的寫(xiě)作成績(jī)值得復(fù)議嗎?

　　老師,

　　您好. 我在您批改的作文中大多得6+, 您對(duì)我的評(píng)語(yǔ)就是英語(yǔ)表達(dá)超6,組織得好就能拿7的那位同學(xué).

　　我在9月23日參加的考試,寫(xiě)作居然只有5分.那次的大作文寫(xiě)的是"越來(lái)越多的人開(kāi)私家車(chē),說(shuō)說(shuō)優(yōu)點(diǎn)和缺點(diǎn)".我是這樣寫(xiě)的:

　　優(yōu)點(diǎn):私家車(chē)能繁榮經(jīng)濟(jì), 特別是汽車(chē)工業(yè).

　　方便, 能隨時(shí)隨地到任何地方,不用象公交車(chē)一樣限定線路和時(shí)間.

　　舒適, 不用擠公交車(chē).

　　缺點(diǎn):令道路更堵塞,特別是上下班高峰期.

　　汽油供應(yīng)短缺,很多私家車(chē)需要排隊(duì)加油(以廣州為例)

　　造成更多的環(huán)境污染.

　　結(jié)尾: 認(rèn)為開(kāi)私家車(chē)的缺點(diǎn)大于優(yōu)點(diǎn).

　　考完出來(lái)自我感覺(jué)良好, 不知是否我這樣寫(xiě)離題了才得個(gè)5分, 還請(qǐng)老師指點(diǎn).

　　我這樣寫(xiě)可以拿6分嗎? 我想申請(qǐng)成績(jī)復(fù)議, 值得這樣做嗎?

　　老師回復(fù):

　　yes,i think u'd better go for an application of reevaluating. anyway, i’ll still need to tell u some mistakes u made.

　　now let me try to simulate how the examiner was looking at your task2 n then drew such a stupid conclusion.

　　the first idea(advantage) is not based on comparison and contrast----more private cars help boom the car manufacturing industryà not a right idea. but the second one hits the point---convenience. how about the drawbacks? traffic jams caused---hmmmm..good idea. more pollution is created---good too. but queue to fill up tanks with gasoline----hmmmm...u might not express it in a coherent way.

　　after all, u included one good point for the positive side n one for the negative side. i believe u dinitely deserve a chance to get band 6. the examiner probably only read the first bit of the advantages n then turned to brily examine the last part and hence marked your paper like this. if u apply for reassessing, the entire paper( two tasks) will be scrutinized by another examiner, n the good points will not be missed. this is why i tend to encourage u to have a try.

　　if unclear, call me .

　　good luck!

　　Andrew

　　學(xué)生最后來(lái)郵

　　I'm glad to tell you that my writing is re-marked as band 6. Thank you very much for the encouragement, otherwise I may lose the confidence to apply the remark.