20分鐘如何寫出托福高分作文

現(xiàn)在很多網(wǎng)上流傳的滿分托福作文，大多是語言能力極好的英語老師，在充裕時間下(也許1個小時以上)，慢功細活，逐步構(gòu)建出的完美文章。其特征，經(jīng)常是，每個分論點都清晰簡潔的列在分論段段首第一句。分論點后接一句句法和單詞都非常高大上的長難句。后面跟更多的高大上解釋。但其實，想在考場上僅有的30分鐘內(nèi)做到這一點，即便是這些老師自己，也是非常困難的。那么，考場上的20分鐘，如何做到高分作文？

所以筆者的寫作課程一直強調(diào)大家練習的，反而是寫好簡單句，和使用簡單，但是準確詞匯的能力。其實練好簡單句，才是托福寫作提分最速成的方法。所以近期會推出一個系列，就是筆者自己在限時情況下(20分鐘左右)，嘗試解一些以前從未寫過的題目。

Agree or Disagree:

A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

高薪少假 vs. 低薪長假

Disagree.

Ideally, everybody’s dream job would be one that pays well and at the same time, has a lot of vacation time. However, in the cold, hard reality, we often have to choose between high salary and vacation time when we just enter the work force. I, personally, would choose the former.

To begin with, less vacation time would only be a temporary phase, but still a necessary one. I say that our final goal is to earn a lot of money, but simultaneously, have a lot of free time to travel, or to do other things that we want. But, how can we get there? The answer is that we still have to strive for it. We have to learn constantly, even after graduation. Many of my senior classmates, parents, relatives, and teachers tell me the importance of life-long learning. They would say that graduation is the starting point of life. So naturally, if you want to learn and grow fast, you should practice more, strive harder, and constantly reflect on what you are doing. To get more practice opportunities, of course, you should get a job that provides you with a stage.

Of the two kinds mentioned in the above statement, it is obvious that a job with high pay and less vacation offers you more opportunities to gain experience. Allow me to point out some simple facts. With a normal job, which starts from 9 and ends at 6, an employee works 8 hours a day, 40 hours per week, 2000 hours per year. With a high pay job, however, overtime is always expected. People with higher salaries often works from 9 to 10, or worse. Accordingly, these people might work 14 hours per day, 80 hours per week, 4000 hours per year, which is just equivalent to two people’s workload in a low paid job. In theory, the latter would grow and gain experience twice as fast as the former. What’s more, growing faster brings even more opportunities. Management always love young people with great potential and ambition, and thus would give them more opportunities and responsibilities. The rewards of choosing a high pay job is not linear in regards to the amount of time you invest. The rewards increase exponentially.

Based on the reasons above, I choose jobs with higher pay but less vacation time.

簡單說一下自己這篇文章的寫作思路。開篇中規(guī)中矩的開頭段。上過強化班的同學都知道開頭段的三要素：背景引入、改寫題中觀點、提出自己觀點。筆者首先拿所有人的夢想中工作，所謂活少錢多型工作，做了個簡單引入。第二句，使用簡單副詞However轉(zhuǎn)折，隨后立即引出并改寫題中觀點。最后第三句，簡練陳述自己觀點 – 高薪少假的工作更好。

通常在考場上時，由于筆者自身的展開能力較強，基本一個分論點可以輕松展開到180字以上。所以，在這樣的情況下，可以不用仔細構(gòu)思文章結(jié)構(gòu)。因為知道即便不仔細構(gòu)思，也不會出現(xiàn)一會寫一半就沒的寫了的尷尬局面。所以這篇文章開頭段寫完以后沒多想，直接在主體段陳述了自己的核心理由，也是筆者最想展開的理由：年輕人必須經(jīng)歷高薪少假的階段。隨后又提到開頭段說到過的話題，我們所有人的最終目標是高薪長假。但我們并不能一步登天，而是要一步一步奮斗。

到這里，大家可以大致看清文章的論證思路了。我們在精講精練班說過，主體段的展開，其實是一個因果邏輯鏈展開和證明的過程?；旧希魏蔚亩温湔归_，其實都是某個邏輯鏈AàB的證明過程。仔細思考的話，不難發(fā)現(xiàn)，其實筆者的論證思路到這，邏輯鏈條已經(jīng)清晰出現(xiàn)，即高薪少假的工作，可以帶來高薪長假的工作。同時，由于這道獨立寫作題是個比較對比題，筆者還要證明的一個邏輯鏈為，低薪長假的工作，不能帶來高薪長假的工作。

基本上，大家看第一個主體段會發(fā)現(xiàn)，筆者在論證的是，想得到高薪長假的工作，一定要奮斗。而第二個主體段在論證的是，高薪少假的工作給我們更多奮斗和鍛煉的機會。多到什么程度呢?比低薪長假的工作多一倍。(2000小時vs. 4000小時部分)所以我們成長的也更快。

寫到這里時，筆者又想到自己以前在會計師事務(wù)所加班的經(jīng)歷。通常加班猛的員工會得到老板的欣賞，因此也會被給予更多的機會和責任。所以便有了第二個主體段的第二個細節(jié)點What’s more的部分。這部分后來一共只寫了50個字。這是因為筆者發(fā)現(xiàn)自己已經(jīng)寫夠了近400字，所以覺得沒有必要再進一步展開了。如果想進一步展開的話，這里最后完全可以再加一個個人經(jīng)歷的example來支持自己前面的觀點。(高薪少假工作有更多的機會)如果真的是在考場上，時間已經(jīng)所剩無幾的話，那么此時就是開啟結(jié)尾段之時。因此，后來直接all in all, 簡單一句陳述結(jié)論：我選擇高薪少假的工作。

不過最后同學們可能會有疑問說，老師，我如果展開能力沒那么強，字數(shù)寫了半天沒湊夠，那咋整?或者有同學會問說，老師，有沒有一個操作性更強的方法?或者說是步驟化的方法?告訴我第一步該干什么，第二步，第三步分別干什么?第一個問題答案：練習展開能力。第二個問題答案依然是肯定的。