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要寫好開頭段首先要明確開頭段的定義。很多學生對文章開頭段重要性的理解只局限于'給考官留個好印象',因此盲目追求過于復雜的模板套句,生搬硬套。其實,開頭段的真正作用是向讀者介紹這篇文章是關于什么、討論的對象是什么。明確了這一目的,那就需要拋棄炫耀式的復雜模板,踏踏實實的讓開頭段真正為文章服務。合理的開頭段可以包括背景介紹、點明話題、闡明觀點,2-3句話,40-60字,5分鐘內完成。
(一)拋棄冗長模板。"使用模板,一律四分"的說法或許有些夸張,但也在一定程度上反映了考官對于模板的深惡痛絕。其實模板套句并不是不能用,而是要運用靈活,不留痕跡。在我見過的很多學員文章中,開頭結尾的兩個復雜到爆炸的長句在通篇簡單句和基礎語法錯誤的映襯下格外醒目,這種稍微有些英語知識的人都會識破的小聰明,更不可能逃過考官的眼睛。在這里建議學生們積累一些簡單實用的基本套句,如,
我們的生活已離不開…
We can not imagine our life without (the mobile phone)。
我們隨處都可以看到…/使用…
(An increasing use of machines) is now being witnessed everywhere。
(Fast food such as KFC and Mcdonald's)now could be found everywhere。
…已成為一個不斷增長的趨勢。
(Urbanization) has established itself as a growing trend。
There emerged a growing trend that (people are pouring into urban areas)。
越來越多的人選擇…/傾向于認為…
More and more people are choosing (to study abroad)。
More and more people tend to believe that (more risks than benits have been brought by air travel)。
…已經(jīng)不再罕見
It is not uncommon to see that (female leaders are playing an equally important role as their male counterparts in various areas)。
It is not uncommon to see (people performing everyday task and even working at home)。
人們開始意識到…
People are beginning to realize (the side fects of television on family relationship)。
在幾十年前,…很少有人會想象到…
Several decades ago, few people could have imagined that (our life would have changed so greatly due to the use of Internet)。
(二)開頭具體化。具體化的開頭是6分以及6分以上文章的一大特點,即 "要讓考官覺得你這個開頭是完全針對題目寫出來的",要做到這一點,就必須緊緊圍繞話題展開。比如下面這道題目:
The development of technology changes the way people interact with each other. In what ways does technology affect the types of relationships people make? Is it a positive or negative development?
(開頭段一)As a matter of fact, the issue on the fects of science and technology is a complex and controversial one. Different individuals can hold various opinions due to their distinct backgrounds, therore, there is no universal answer to this question. In some areas, some people believe that technology has brought benits on people's relationship, in other fields, others mountain that it has some side fects。
(開頭段二) It is undeniable that science and technology has played an increasingly important role in modern society. The benits brought by such trend are obvious, but problems have also been welled up. As for its influences on people's relationship, I believe the advantages brought by technology outweigh its drawbacks。
(開頭段三) Even two decades ago, few people could have imagined that we can perform our daily tasks via computer. Now more and more people are choosing to do the shopping, banking and even work online. So how can such trend affect the interactions between modern-day people? I will give my answer in the following essay。
開頭段一為典型的模板式開頭,廢話多,與話題關系小,毫無疑問會引起考官的反感。開頭段二雖然也使用了模板句, 但運用較靈活,不足之處是背景句沒有緊扣話題,雖然談到科技影響生活但沒有具體到'relationship'。開頭段三語言雖簡單但緊緊圍繞話題'relationships'展開,靈活的使用了一些簡短的小套句,而這樣具體化的開頭最受考官青睞。
(三)簡單即是美。雅思作文考的不是文學修養(yǎng)而是學術寫作能力,即如何運用語言有效的表達觀點證明觀點,因此,簡單明了的開頭會給考官留下效率高的好印象,而且簡單的開頭段避免了使用模板的嫌疑也節(jié)省了時間。例:
Science and technology have changed people's relationships significantly, which I believe has more benits than risks。
It is argued that more risks than benits have been brought by the development of technology on people's relationships. Personally, I can hardly agree with this opinion。
最后,寫作重在練習,所謂熟能生巧,開頭段的構思亦是一樣。
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